Monday, August 15, 2011
so after taking you guys advice, i decided to set the story aside for a while. to try to get the passion back i had before for it, i re-read what i had written. while i can say i liked what i wrote, i realized that there were segments that needed to be re-imagined. tomorrow i will post the next part of the story, which was on of the parts that needed re-working. in the original i had the next day start way to soon and the action escalated in a forced way.im trying to make the story flow better because this is when the story finally gets a good twist to it. i added a new segment of dialog traded between Blane and Kelli. im also adding an encounter with the ruler of New Vegas, Sazz.